Stanza and Analysis

Bathroom

Humid vomit fills pores

Rushing moisture

Blazing Freezing

Piled putrid particles

Steaming stringy suds

Friday’s festivities fester

Weekend without wafting waste

Never.

Critical Analysis:

My stanza entitled “Bathroom,” is about the disgusting discovery of an alcohol induced vomit pile in the bathroom of my dorm and the feelings that coincide with a place of cleanliness smelling of rancor for the duration of a week. The stanza is in free verse in order to mirror the freedom with which college students enter into during their freshman year. The lack of organized meter communicates the lack of forethought when it comes to the consequences of last night. There is a great deal of Alliteration that focuses on hard and stabbing sounds in lines 4, 5 and 6. In lines 4 and 5 the alliteration of “S” and “F” produce a hard sound and these sounds remind the reader of frustration and heavy breathing. The image of the “rushing moisture” in line 2 can be taken as the literal interpretation of a shower head, or as the sweating of the alcohol-sickened vomit culprit. The same double meaning can be found in line 3, the words “Blazing Freezing” can be referring to either the temperature of the water or the body temperature fluctuations of an inebriated person. The alliteration of the “W” in line 7 produces a sigh-like quality, this communicates the floor’s attitude toward the inconvenience. The amount of lines in the stanza also is of significance. The abundance of alliteration also communicates the persistence of the smell.  With the omission of the final “Never” of line 8, there are 7 lines in this stanza. The 7 lines represent the days of the week and reinforce the persistence of the odor. This also suggests a cycle with which this behavior revolves around. The following weekend the incident reoccurred and the odor that was almost faded was revived and poignant once more. The last Word of the stanza, comprising all of line 8, is “Never.” The use of punctuation and brevity suggest a lack of hope on our floor that friendly fragrance will return.

 

 

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About James George

James is an undergraduate English major at Dickinson College located in Carlisle, PA. In his free time he collages, sings in vocal ensembles (Infernos a cappella and Collegium), and writes poetry. His perfect night would involve all three of those activities and a thanksgiving dinner where everything looks like food but is in fact candy.

One thought on “Stanza and Analysis

  1. This is a great piece. I especially enjoyed how few words you used. “Piled putrid particles” sounds good when you read it out loud repetitively.

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