The essay we are given to explain the grade for makes sense as an A given your standards. It does not appear to run afoul of any of the parts that would make it lose an automatic ten percent, the font, spacing etc. all appear correct. The thesis is takes a large topic and is able to answer the given topic clearly and concisely. The paper flows chronologically and addresses the ideas presented the thesis in order. The topic sentences each present the ideas that will be addressed in the following paragraph. Each source that is used is analyzed and then conclusions are drawn in a logical manner from the document. In my albeit not exhaustive reading of the essay it appeared that it had very few grammatical and punctuation errors. It appears to have been proofed several times. The vocabulary is clearly educated but none of it should be hard for a college student to understand. While obviously we where not allowed the length to explain everything mentioned in depth but the essay is able to give a reader, even one who does not necessarily know about the topic enough information to understand what it is about. The author of this essay approached had a clear plan for how they would write it. Either outlined before or after their first draft they set up a logical order that would address every part of the thesis. The lack of errors and the fact that no sentences are just off the wall confusing makes me assume it was done in several drafts, very likely with an outside reader as well. The essay makes use of several primary sources which are all cited. They all add to the readers understanding and the conclusions drawn from them are central evidence in the essay. The essay follows almost all of the guidelines set pout in various documents for writings in this class. It also achieves A level in all the categories of the rubric.