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I like your topic and I think it fits in nicely with the utopia/dystopia theme but I couldn’t help but wonder whether or not you were trying to persuade me to feel that prisons need reformed or that the war on drugs is a failure.
Great job with your sounds and images. You give a lot of detailed information in regards to current laws, and make it clear why you think rehabilitation would work. I think it would be interesting if you explained how the overcrowding issue would no longer exist by sending drug users to rehabilitation centers because wouldn’t it cause overcrowding at those centers? Overall, great job! You chose a very interesting topic that I’m sure was hard to tackle.
In your video, you focused on reform for drug users in prisons but what about reform for the other prisoners? I think you if you provided at least two more examples of reform for other types of prisoners, it would help your argument. You did an awesome job though, love the images.
I thought your argument was really clear, strong, and persuasive. You presented evidence that demonstrated why we need change, then what the change should be, and why it would be better then what we have today. The images were also relevant and added visual strength to what you were saying.
I enjoyed your video and topic. I think that because you introduced two fairly large ideas there was potential for your project to be confusing, but you managed to address both of them pretty well. Additionally, I liked how your pictures seemed to correlate with what you were saying.
Good Job Ryan! I thought there were some great points in this video however you should have talked more about other forms of convictions aside from drug related arrests. Other than that, great job!
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